Dwinney
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posted 04-12-2001 04:28 GMT
Excellent story! I like to write stories, too, but I think I\'ll wait till the demo\'s released before writing anything. I just need to know
more about the game first. By the way what are your ages? Nothing personal, just interested in knowing the major age groups
who will play this game.
whitti
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posted 05-12-2001 22:42 GMT
I\'m in the creation of a story...be prepared people
It is about my (whitti the charachter)s father
Archbishop Xaiver
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posted 06-12-2001 01:32 GMT
Very nicely written, I like how you get into such great detail!!
Oldman Kay
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posted 06-12-2001 02:32 GMT
Here is one by moi,
I sat, mediating. I had woven together some straw into a makeshift mat. I sat on the mat. Intense silence is needed for the
grandest power, and I was almost there. Silence. Silence. My body started to lift. Higher, inch by inch. I leviated even higher. I
clenched my hands. My senses were gone. The only thing I could feel is the silent yet screached pulsation of my brain and heart
working together as one. Peace and tranquility. I lifted. Higher and higher. I was 3 stories in the air by now. I opened my hands
and held them out. I spoke the words that I had been taught by my grandfather just before his death,
\"Ahmon-rhea-da-kata-sa-men-asta.\" A power quietly shivered in a minute light in my palms. Sweat trickled down my face as the
light become became brighter and brighter. I screamed the final words \"Darem-osa-da-rem-ena!\" The power engulfed my hands
and up my arms, down my chest and legs until I was inside the power.
I opened my eyes, I saw the glow of the power around me. I slowly lowered myself to the ground. I closed my eyes and then
started to control the energy. The power slowly worked its way into a small circle in front of my chest. In leviated for a second the
shot out 3 yards away from me. I moved my hands in a motion to come to me. The circle of power raced towards me and shot
inside my chest. I had found the ultimate power and now I could control it for it was inside me. I raised my hand, fixated the
power on my hand, the light slightly glimered, then it a beam shot out of my hand and blew up a nearby boulder.
I showed no emotion for my new found power, and lowered my hand. I opened my eyes to suddenly see some blunt object
swinging towards my face. It was to late to react and I was struck in the head and knocked unconscious.
I awoke in a dark cavern. Three sconces were on the wall almost giving off enough light to see. I was on some stone table, and
something was strapped around me. I concentrated for a minute and realised the power was gone, but I could slightly feel that a
bit of it was still left inside me. I concentrated the power, but suddenly I felt a hand on my arm. It felt furry, and claws on the
fingers stratched my skin.
I looked over and saw purple glowing eyes. They stood there, stairing deep into my eyes. My eye lids grew heavy. I quickly
understood that this creature was doing some sort of hypnotism. I tried to open my eyes more but it was so hard. Not knowing
what to do, I spit at the eyes that hovered in front of me. It hit the creature. It grunted and a bit of steam filled the air. It smelled
like rotten eggs. I felt the steam closer to my face, the eyes were gone but I could still smell the rotten egg smell. Then it
stopped.
I looked over at the sconces as one by one they lit up and I noticed the hovering purple eyes standing next to them. It looked
back at me and grunted. I saw some sort of claw reach into the flaw and it caught on fire. It slightly moved its claw and flung it at
me. I gasped and concentrated as hard as I could. The flame stopped in mid-air. I had control over it, so I lifted it up and threw it
at the creature. It hit it and apparently lit its arm-hair on fire. It screamed and flung its arm violently in attempt to extinguish the
fire.
I heard some strange noise as if stomping feet. I looked to my left and saw 5 sets of purple eyes coming into the room threw a
dark hallway. They grunted and pushed the other creature to the ground. I could not see what was happening but I heard the
creatures clawing into something, and a single creature screaming. They had killed the creature who had its arm lit on fire,
apparently they did not like mistakes.
The straps binding my legs and arms down were ripped off and two of the creatures picked me up. They hurried me off to some
cavern where I saw a lava flow, and a solid gold statue of some ape-like creature in front on a ledge. The lava flowed as if a
water-fall into some extremely deep gourge. They hurried to the edge. I saw hundreds of other eyes. Then they closed. I heard
some strange grunting noise and I was lifted higher. Suddenly the creatures holding me pulled me backwards. I now knew what
would happen. They flung me fowards into the volcanic flow.
I twisted in the air and grabbed on to the statue and flipped backwards back onto the ground. All the creature\'s eyes were closed
now except for the two that threw me. They screamed, and I also heard some wild beating noises as if slamming their fists
against some surface. I ran for my life and grabbed a sconce on the wall and ran down a cavern. I could here the thundering of
the creatures\' feet behind me.
I turned left, then right, and heard the sound of water. I knew the water might lead to a source outside, it was my only hope of
survival. I ran towards the rushing water and finally found a waterfall. I looked to my left and right and noticed three creatures.
Apparently it wasn\'t the light that made them invisible, they were natural shadows! The hairs grew on their bodies as some sort of
sense, probably for feeling. Except for their glowing eyes, all you could see was an extremely faint shadow. I ran foward but one
of the shadow creatures jumped in front of me. Its arm swung at me and I ducked to the floor and tried to trip it, but my leg
simply went threw it. Another swing smacked me in the side. Another one hit my leg. I did not know what to do. But wait, fire! It
hurt that other creature, it must hurt them all!
The sconce was on the floor so I quickly grabbed it. I swung it around in front of me. The shadow creatures backed off. I slowly
stepped to the edge of the waterfall. I heard a dripping, and suddenly a few drops dripped on the sconce, extinguishing it. The
creatures grunted again and raced towards me. I suddenly stopped, and concentrated and I leviated. I flew up into the air, but to
my surprise the creatures could float to. I concentrated once more and opened my palm. I focused and controlled the energy.
Two of the creatures charged at me. I clenched my palm, then opened it and power shot out light the two creatures on fire
sending them sprawling to the ground.
The third creature flew in front of me. It swung its arm and I dodged. But it swung too fast but my arm stopped it right in front of
my face. It grunted, then started to laugh. I concentrated and clenched my hand. I swiftly raised it in front of me and opened it
igniting the creature.
I looked down and saw the rest of the praying shadows. They flew towards me. I then let go and fell. I fell all the way to the
bottom of the waterfall. I swam under it and out into a small stream leading to a forest. I looked back and saw nothing, they were
finally gone.
Oldman Kay
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posted 06-12-2001 02:42 GMT
In paragraph 2 or 3 I wrote:
quote:
I saw some sort of claw reach into the flaw and it caught on fire.
Flaw should be changed to Sconce. I have no earthly idea why I wrote flaw.
Kendaro
Guest
posted 07-12-2001 11:08 GMT
Chapter 2 is done. You can find it on my PlaneShift community and or the link for it over on Whitties thread in Wish List.
Gion
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posted 07-12-2001 15:13 GMT
I have read chapter 2 , and its good
wickedways
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posted 08-12-2001 06:05 GMT
who is running the zeal clan here u kendaro
Gion
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posted 08-12-2001 13:19 GMT
The Leaders of the Zeal clan are : NecromancerZeal and BinaryReject
I am a member of the Zeal clan
If u whant more information check out our
site and post your questions on the Zeal forum.
Greetzz
Gion.
Member of the Zeal Clan
http://www.zealclan.cjb.net BinaryReject
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posted 09-12-2001 10:01 GMT
very well written kendaro, as gion said, i felt as if i was reading a book...im heading over to read chapter 2.
Leader of the Zeal Clan
http://Http://Www.ZealClan.Cjb.Net Kendaro
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posted 10-12-2001 00:01 GMT
there is a chapter three now... :p