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Kixie

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"Chat blanc de vif amour"
« on: October 26, 2006, 01:31:32 pm »
English title: "The white cat of agile love"

Aye, t’was the season that fruit bore weighty
   On the silmaaran boughs and treesun vines
The clackers shook wings, fitful spar of mating
   Shunning the feet of the passerbys

It was here on the hills so lush with sage
   I gazed on what I thought ‘magination
Mesmerizing white, with no signs of age
   She danced through the brooks without hesitation

Her paw met waters, yet spread not a ripple
   And her claw did not sheer any bark from their trees
Oh what woe be if this maiden were cripple
   For her ankles swept comely as if graced with wings

Ah such sweet hazel kernels sat on those cheeks
   Not for a second were e’er hidden by lid
Her jaw was in regards just as discrete
   Yet she sung in a voice I shall ne’er be rid

After the azure dimmed and night draped above
   I lie ‘moung flowers now shut with sleep
Restless my soul, hind gazing ‘carnate love
   Yet I pressed not to mar my face with weep

Not a moment after that crystal on high
   Was full as a spring well is filled to the brim
Returned to the brook of yesterday, had I
    Shortly hereafter, countless tear met my chin

At times like a seer patient, and wise
  The waters seemed all but placid with ease
Yet mist accrued from rock still did not prise
   As comely when day before ended fine’ly

Nay those waters did not possess grace
   Since, when before that maiden met shores
The rocks now seemingly wept from its face
   As if water was within its own hidden stores

Return to hillsides threw my heart in woe
   I peered through the hedges for a sight of that fleece
And rewarded was my search, Behold!
   For now returned hath that feline, she.

Without hesitation I ran to embrace
   That nymph who had exalted such fine airs
She did not coward from my presence or face
   Instead she gazed forward entranced in a stare

She did not falter, nor sped with a step
   Still as the marble effigies of Laanx
Comely even this state was she yet
   But not till in my arms would I give thanks

But she fled to the hills at my very touch
   As if my hands gave the pains of hot ember
While I ne’er ‘gain spied that pelt I longed much
    In the faces of all, that feline I remember

This is inspired by the work of Keats, "La belle dame sans merci" although not a direct imitation of prose.

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« Last Edit: October 26, 2006, 01:36:02 pm by Kixie »

Nurahk

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Re: "Chat blanc de vif amour"
« Reply #1 on: October 26, 2006, 02:09:22 pm »
Wow Kixie, very nice.

How long did that take you?

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« Reply #2 on: October 26, 2006, 02:10:43 pm »
Wow Kixie, very nice.

How long did that take you?
Well, I discovered the story last night, and starting writing at 8 this morning... so about 4 hours give or take. Sometimes I feel that I should take another day to edit and revise, but I felt this one was ready.