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Fan Area => Roleplaying (Communitive Storywriting) => Single Author Stories => Topic started by: danti-christ on November 30, 2004, 03:16:33 pm

Title: first part of my time (the story of danti-christ)
Post by: danti-christ on November 30, 2004, 03:16:33 pm

with the sands of time i came from the depths not knowing where i came from not knowing who or what my parents where
my first memory came from ashes from a time when i dont quite know when pain is all i felt

all i see is the fear in my heart but i can not show it for if i do the trials of life will spill from my veins and the road which i start to tread will take hold of me and i shall become one with pain and one with hate and all shall fear me

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Post by: Bjorn on November 30, 2004, 04:53:18 pm

Umm... Interesting indeed. Maybe try making it a bit longer, and put proper punctuation and maybe a period in there once or twice?