PlaneShift

Fan Area => Roleplaying (Communitive Storywriting) => Poetry, Comedy, and other. => Topic started by: Under the moon on December 21, 2004, 08:50:35 am

Title: I NEED input. Good, bad, I don't care.
Post by: Under the moon on December 21, 2004, 08:50:35 am

I need  input on my story \'Chain of Souls\'.  
Is it on par with what is expected in PS?  Do you like it, despise it, is there anything I should change in existing or future chapters?  
I am sorry about the length, I simply can\'t write anything shorter, so don\'t ask.

Forgot link->Chain of Souls (http://www.planeshift3d.com/wbboard/thread.php?threadid=11668&boardid=15&styleid=3&sid=1cd79e116d29587119c6fc7864538e23)

*edit again* Important question!  
I give you a chance to affect the outcome of my story.  There is a choice at the end of chapter four.

Now I will let this thread die. *Hands a lock to Moogie*

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Post by: Under the moon on December 21, 2004, 07:11:46 pm

*Edit* I\'m over it.  I have completed the fourth chapter if anyone noticed. Three or four (or more) left to go.  Feel free to post comments in my story thread, as I am going to let this one die.

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Post by: Merdarion on December 21, 2004, 07:25:07 pm

Well, don\'t mind it to much.

But your story is soo super. I really love it.

It took me real tears when reading about the main-chars heart been torn apart with Sabrenes cries of pain.

SORRYY ABOUT THE LENGTH???

That\'S one of the things that makes it unique!!

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Post by: Entamis on December 21, 2004, 11:45:27 pm

The story is great! It\'s very emotional. Don\'t worry about length, it\'s actually a good thing to have more details.
But it isn\'t related to PlaneShift, is it?

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Post by: swift on December 21, 2004, 11:49:48 pm

I like it - the length is good.  

But still not long enough :( !

Please write more !

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Post by: Under the moon on December 22, 2004, 03:14:21 am

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Originally posted by Entamis
But it isn\'t related to PlaneShift, is it?

This story is inspired by, and written just for PlainShift.  It just does not begin in PS.  In just two more chapters much will change and be explained.

It\'s all for you my friends. Enjoy!

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Post by: swift on December 22, 2004, 03:18:59 am

Then can we please have those two chapters ? :)

I don\'t believe you, so please prove it !

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Post by: Entamis on December 22, 2004, 02:38:40 pm

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This tale does not start in Yliakum but it will get there, be patient.

Oops I didn\'t notice that. My fault. :rolleyes:

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Post by: Under the moon on December 22, 2004, 06:43:53 pm

@ Master Swift :)Seeing is beleaving.

The third chapter is done.  The change has begun.  Actualy, it began somewhere towards the end of chapter one, but it was only three small words.  Think you can find them? :D

And I bet you know what that blue light is ;).

Enjoy!

Due to lack of sleep and other stuff, you may have to wait till next week for the next instalment. This is not writer\'s block, don\'t worry. I have the whole story planed out, right down to the special ending. Should be at least four more chapters (and I thought I could write the whole thing in four, sheesh :rolleyes: ).  Also, I won\'t be on the forums for a few days.

I\'m back and rested.  The next chapter is started.  More coming soon!

 Chapter is three quarters done, YAY.  and a new pic. Enjoy

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Post by: Merdarion on December 23, 2004, 08:24:38 pm

I can imagine what the light is (PS), but that laughter very misterious.