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Gameplay => General Discussion => Topic started by: steuben on May 07, 2007, 03:44:43 am

Title: the light
Post by: steuben on May 07, 2007, 03:44:43 am

this doesn't feel like it fits well in the stories forum. been bouncing around by head for a while. but from a mind that thinks in hypertext and metaphor...

i wandered among the worlds.
i came into the light.
i walked among those who wandered the world.

i saw the vision, and was blinded by its light.
i stood transfixed by the light.
i stood afraid to leave the light.

i saw those move unknowing of the vision
i saw them leashed by the vision
i saw them wail at their unseen leash

i saw those who moved blinded by the vision.
i saw them leashed by the vision.
i saw them gnash their teeth at the leash.

i saw others who moved.
i saw them sighted with the vision in their eyes.
i saw them walk with the leash in their hands.

i sat and watch those around me.
i felt the vision in my mind.
i saw the light in my eyes.

i knew my path.

Title: Re: the light
Post by: Feline Prince on May 07, 2007, 05:18:11 pm

I love it but really think it should be in the story writing section. The idea behind it is awesome what ever it may be, I get an image of how differnt people handle things that happen in life.

Title: Re: the light
Post by: mufler on May 07, 2007, 05:19:58 pm

 \\o//

good one!

Title: Re: the light
Post by: steuben on May 07, 2007, 07:33:27 pm

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The idea behind it is awesome what ever it may be,

the hint is: ps

Title: Re: the light
Post by: Feline Prince on May 07, 2007, 07:36:17 pm

Now you say that it makes me think about the poor DEV team everytime i read it.

Title: Re: the light
Post by: Raleigh on May 07, 2007, 08:29:49 pm

In the land of the blind, the one-eyed man is king. Imagine who has both.

Title: Re: the light
Post by: Illyria on May 07, 2007, 10:19:58 pm

 :) Nice, made me think of this song (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VskVWe8akso)   :lol:

Title: the dream
Post by: steuben on July 31, 2007, 03:29:05 am

every night i see the dream.
all that it can be.
 all that it should be.
 all that it will be.

the horrors of such a dream.
 the pleasures of such a dream.

i feel the dream.
i felt the dream.
the dream nestles.
the dream entwines.

the dream becomes me as much as i am it.