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Gameplay => General Discussion => Topic started by: Talad on January 06, 2002, 02:00:12 pm
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THIS MESSAGE IS TAKEN FROM OLD BOARD:
Kendaro
Guest
posted 03-12-2001 23:10 GMT
Well I know I like to write stories. I don\'t know how many of you do though. So what I have thought of was to start this thread and
post a piece I have just finished. In this thread please feel free to post your own works. It would be nice if they had at least some
type of PlaneShift background to them so to not seem too off topic for these boards. Well enjoy, and I hope to see and read
some of your works as well. Who knows, if the team happens to like anything we have written there might be an opportunity for
background or setting positions. Not saying there will be but who knows.
Enjoy,
It was mid day. The crystal was shining brightly off the the water of a small river. A band of adventurers has arrived at this river
and stoped for a minute to inspect a strange sight. For there in the midst of the river, where the water rolled over a small ledge,
sat an Enkidukai. This seemed strange to the adventurers cause with the Enkidukai being partly cat like, they are not knows to
like the water. Matter of fact, they normally avoid water at any cost. Now here sat an Enkidukai inside a small waterfall with the
water pouring all around him.
The adventurers moved in closer to inspect this irregularity further. The Enkidukai was not moving at all. He just sat there, legs
crosses, arms draped to his sides, and his eyes closed tightly. He almost seemed like he was asleep. This intrigued the
adventurers more and more and they moved ever closer.
\"Come no closer.\", said the Enkidukai without opening his eyes. \"You are many. What is it you wish of here?\"
\"What are you are doing in the waterfall?\", the adventurers asked.
The Enkidukai responded still with his eyes closed tightly, \"Searching for peace of mind.\"
The adventurers then asked, \"Who, if we may ask, are you?\"
The Enkidukai rose to his feet then sprung from where he was sitting. With a large leaping flip, the Enkidukai now stood face to
face with the adventures. With his eyes now wide open he raises his left fist and thumps it to his chest. He then bows before
them and says, \"The Kendaro here, at your service.\"
The Enkidukai, named Kendaro, was tall and his fur was brownish in color. He was slender but one could feel the strength he
possessed. His eyes were brown and he glowered over each of the adventurers as though to size them up. His piercing eyes
made the adventurers feel slightly uneasy. Kendaro, feeling this uneasiness, then snickered softly and with a crooked sneer
spoke again, \"The Kendaro will show you to a place where you can rest, get food, and get drink. You look like very tired
adventurers to the Kendaro. The Kendaro shall help you gain your strength back.\"
With that he turned sideways to bid the adventurers to follow. The adventurers looked puzzled but decided to follow Kendaro.
After all if this were a trap, they were many and he was just but one Enkidukai.
Kendaro lead them to a small hut like structure. Inside the adventurers found the hut to be quite comfortable though it lacked any
of the finer things they were used to. In the left corner was a rolled up straw mat. It must have been Kendaro\'s bed. To the center
of the hut was a small wooden table where a picture of water sat next to several wooden goblets. Around the table were several
wooden chairs and to the surprise of the adventurers, there was exactly the same amount of chairs as them. Over in the right
corner was a fire pit. The pit had a large pipe about two foot above it that then lead up and out of the roof. On this fire were several
fish being smoked. Again there was the exact same number of smoking fish as there were adventurers.
The adventures, feeling real uneasy about this situation, start mumbling between each other. Kendaro then spoke to ease the
adventurers, \"Fear not friends. The Kendaro has sensed you coming and prepared for you well. Eat, drink, and be the Kendaro\'s
guests while you regain your strength. When done, the Kendaro shall be outside to guide you back to your adventure.\"
Now the adventurers were feeling slightly better but all types of exadjurations began to fly as they ate the fish cautiously. \"He
must be some type of wizard.\" one of them said. \"Maybe a great shaman.\" another mentioned. \"I bet he has some type of mind
reading ability.\" was said by yet another. \"He is outside, lets see what he is up to.\" said the leader of the group.
A few of the adventurers went over to one of the small circular windows and spied out to see what Kendaro was doing. What they
saw was unusual and quite strange to them. He was out there by himself and doing what they thought to be a dance. The
movements were as if he was fighting someone in slow motion. The transition from one move to another was done slow but the
initial move itself was fast and showed great power. The onlookers were both amazed and confused at what they were seeing.
After watching him for a while, the adventurers all came out and watched Kendaro. Soon Kendaro stopped moving and stood
silently in the field. The adventurers advanced, with puzzled looks, and asked, \"What is it that you were just doing? We thought it
was some type of dance but it wasn\'t like anything we have ever seen.\"
\"The Kendaro was performing his kata.\", he responded. \"It is how the Kendaro keeps his fighting skills and body sharp.\"
\"KATA? What is this kata you speak of?\", they asked.
Kendaro responded, \"Kata is form made up of many fighting moves all put together to make it easy for the Kendaro to remember
them.\" He then continued, \"Was the Kendaro\'s cooking to your liking? If so and you are all well rested now, the Kendaro will lead
you back to your adventure.\"
The adventurers all nodded their heads in satisfaction and gathered their things to return to their journey. Kendaro then lead them
back to the river where they first found him. He pointed in the direction that would be the safest for them to travel. As they walked
off, Kendaro shouted to them, \"If ever you find yourselves in need of a friend. Don\'t hesitate to call on the Kendaro. The Kendaro
will always be willing to help.\"
Gion
Guest
posted 03-12-2001 23:34 GMT
verry nice written,
i thougth i was reading a book.
greetzz
Gion.
Member of the Zeal Clan
http://www.zealclan.cjb.net
NecromancerZeal
Guest
posted 04-12-2001 01:24 GMT
Wow thats really good, What do you sell books or something? Will there be a part 2? The world may never know. All in All Great
Story!
Leader of the Zeal Clan
http://www.ZealClan.Cjb.Net
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Dwinney
Guest
posted 04-12-2001 04:28 GMT
Excellent story! I like to write stories, too, but I think I\'ll wait till the demo\'s released before writing anything. I just need to know
more about the game first. By the way what are your ages? Nothing personal, just interested in knowing the major age groups
who will play this game.
whitti
Guest
posted 05-12-2001 22:42 GMT
I\'m in the creation of a story...be prepared people :)
It is about my (whitti the charachter)s father :)
Archbishop Xaiver
Guest
posted 06-12-2001 01:32 GMT
Very nicely written, I like how you get into such great detail!!
Oldman Kay
Guest
posted 06-12-2001 02:32 GMT
Here is one by moi,
I sat, mediating. I had woven together some straw into a makeshift mat. I sat on the mat. Intense silence is needed for the
grandest power, and I was almost there. Silence. Silence. My body started to lift. Higher, inch by inch. I leviated even higher. I
clenched my hands. My senses were gone. The only thing I could feel is the silent yet screached pulsation of my brain and heart
working together as one. Peace and tranquility. I lifted. Higher and higher. I was 3 stories in the air by now. I opened my hands
and held them out. I spoke the words that I had been taught by my grandfather just before his death,
\"Ahmon-rhea-da-kata-sa-men-asta.\" A power quietly shivered in a minute light in my palms. Sweat trickled down my face as the
light become became brighter and brighter. I screamed the final words \"Darem-osa-da-rem-ena!\" The power engulfed my hands
and up my arms, down my chest and legs until I was inside the power.
I opened my eyes, I saw the glow of the power around me. I slowly lowered myself to the ground. I closed my eyes and then
started to control the energy. The power slowly worked its way into a small circle in front of my chest. In leviated for a second the
shot out 3 yards away from me. I moved my hands in a motion to come to me. The circle of power raced towards me and shot
inside my chest. I had found the ultimate power and now I could control it for it was inside me. I raised my hand, fixated the
power on my hand, the light slightly glimered, then it a beam shot out of my hand and blew up a nearby boulder.
I showed no emotion for my new found power, and lowered my hand. I opened my eyes to suddenly see some blunt object
swinging towards my face. It was to late to react and I was struck in the head and knocked unconscious.
I awoke in a dark cavern. Three sconces were on the wall almost giving off enough light to see. I was on some stone table, and
something was strapped around me. I concentrated for a minute and realised the power was gone, but I could slightly feel that a
bit of it was still left inside me. I concentrated the power, but suddenly I felt a hand on my arm. It felt furry, and claws on the
fingers stratched my skin.
I looked over and saw purple glowing eyes. They stood there, stairing deep into my eyes. My eye lids grew heavy. I quickly
understood that this creature was doing some sort of hypnotism. I tried to open my eyes more but it was so hard. Not knowing
what to do, I spit at the eyes that hovered in front of me. It hit the creature. It grunted and a bit of steam filled the air. It smelled
like rotten eggs. I felt the steam closer to my face, the eyes were gone but I could still smell the rotten egg smell. Then it
stopped.
I looked over at the sconces as one by one they lit up and I noticed the hovering purple eyes standing next to them. It looked
back at me and grunted. I saw some sort of claw reach into the flaw and it caught on fire. It slightly moved its claw and flung it at
me. I gasped and concentrated as hard as I could. The flame stopped in mid-air. I had control over it, so I lifted it up and threw it
at the creature. It hit it and apparently lit its arm-hair on fire. It screamed and flung its arm violently in attempt to extinguish the
fire.
I heard some strange noise as if stomping feet. I looked to my left and saw 5 sets of purple eyes coming into the room threw a
dark hallway. They grunted and pushed the other creature to the ground. I could not see what was happening but I heard the
creatures clawing into something, and a single creature screaming. They had killed the creature who had its arm lit on fire,
apparently they did not like mistakes.
The straps binding my legs and arms down were ripped off and two of the creatures picked me up. They hurried me off to some
cavern where I saw a lava flow, and a solid gold statue of some ape-like creature in front on a ledge. The lava flowed as if a
water-fall into some extremely deep gourge. They hurried to the edge. I saw hundreds of other eyes. Then they closed. I heard
some strange grunting noise and I was lifted higher. Suddenly the creatures holding me pulled me backwards. I now knew what
would happen. They flung me fowards into the volcanic flow.
I twisted in the air and grabbed on to the statue and flipped backwards back onto the ground. All the creature\'s eyes were closed
now except for the two that threw me. They screamed, and I also heard some wild beating noises as if slamming their fists
against some surface. I ran for my life and grabbed a sconce on the wall and ran down a cavern. I could here the thundering of
the creatures\' feet behind me.
I turned left, then right, and heard the sound of water. I knew the water might lead to a source outside, it was my only hope of
survival. I ran towards the rushing water and finally found a waterfall. I looked to my left and right and noticed three creatures.
Apparently it wasn\'t the light that made them invisible, they were natural shadows! The hairs grew on their bodies as some sort of
sense, probably for feeling. Except for their glowing eyes, all you could see was an extremely faint shadow. I ran foward but one
of the shadow creatures jumped in front of me. Its arm swung at me and I ducked to the floor and tried to trip it, but my leg
simply went threw it. Another swing smacked me in the side. Another one hit my leg. I did not know what to do. But wait, fire! It
hurt that other creature, it must hurt them all!
The sconce was on the floor so I quickly grabbed it. I swung it around in front of me. The shadow creatures backed off. I slowly
stepped to the edge of the waterfall. I heard a dripping, and suddenly a few drops dripped on the sconce, extinguishing it. The
creatures grunted again and raced towards me. I suddenly stopped, and concentrated and I leviated. I flew up into the air, but to
my surprise the creatures could float to. I concentrated once more and opened my palm. I focused and controlled the energy.
Two of the creatures charged at me. I clenched my palm, then opened it and power shot out light the two creatures on fire
sending them sprawling to the ground.
The third creature flew in front of me. It swung its arm and I dodged. But it swung too fast but my arm stopped it right in front of
my face. It grunted, then started to laugh. I concentrated and clenched my hand. I swiftly raised it in front of me and opened it
igniting the creature.
I looked down and saw the rest of the praying shadows. They flew towards me. I then let go and fell. I fell all the way to the
bottom of the waterfall. I swam under it and out into a small stream leading to a forest. I looked back and saw nothing, they were
finally gone.
Oldman Kay
Guest
posted 06-12-2001 02:42 GMT
In paragraph 2 or 3 I wrote:
quote:
I saw some sort of claw reach into the flaw and it caught on fire.
Flaw should be changed to Sconce. I have no earthly idea why I wrote flaw.
Kendaro
Guest
posted 07-12-2001 11:08 GMT
Chapter 2 is done. You can find it on my PlaneShift community and or the link for it over on Whitties thread in Wish List.
Gion
Guest
posted 07-12-2001 15:13 GMT
I have read chapter 2 , and its good
wickedways
Guest
posted 08-12-2001 06:05 GMT
who is running the zeal clan here u kendaro
Gion
Guest
posted 08-12-2001 13:19 GMT
The Leaders of the Zeal clan are : NecromancerZeal and BinaryReject
I am a member of the Zeal clan
If u whant more information check out our
site and post your questions on the Zeal forum.
Greetzz
Gion.
Member of the Zeal Clan
http://www.zealclan.cjb.net
BinaryReject
Guest
posted 09-12-2001 10:01 GMT
very well written kendaro, as gion said, i felt as if i was reading a book...im heading over to read chapter 2.
Leader of the Zeal Clan
http://Http://Www.ZealClan.Cjb.Net
Kendaro
Guest
posted 10-12-2001 00:01 GMT
there is a chapter three now... :p