you\'re story is great but is quite vague. you could add more detail by putting in where the staires were where you fell down and died and what did the lanterns look like in the Death Realm also description of the bones and skulls
My Dogs are called Sasha and Dash, (Sasha is in the front of the picture she usally watches tv, she is 3 years old while Dash is 1 year old, for unusal reasons Dash is bigger than Sasha)