Everyone should expect criticism and they should expect criticism on their criticism.  However, constructive and helpful criticism is the only way a benefit will come from it and the next roleplay will be better, and the next, and so on.

I like the way this is set up, summarized and executed so far.  Not ignoring the NPCs is always nice to see, and the distraction is pretty believable that an item could be stolen from Kada's and they could possibly get past the guards without being noticed.  Using Alts is perfectly fine as the population of Hydlaa is not just the 15-20 players that happen to be in the city, but hundreds of citizens going about their business along with the NPCs that should be treated as alive.  You just have to use your imagination and try to keep a realistic view of how a city like Hydlaa would look and feel like.

The title can always be worked on and usually authors come up with that last anyway.  I had no idea about any prior references, but it I'm thinking it is a play on how Hangatyr is usually cool and collected and now someone has just ticked him off.  Not sure where the Song part comes in, but maybe it will come into play down the road.  If not, then when it is all said and done, maybe another title will come around.

Nice job, Sashia.  Good luck with the progress of it.

Hmm, the skin may just need to be set.  Run ./pslaunch, go to Settings and under Current Skin, switch that to elves, should be at the top.  I don't think default comes with the client anymore, you need to select elves, or rename elves to default.  You might be good to go after that, but joining channel #planeshift-build in IRC may be a good place to ask about the compiling part if you still have some issues.  Good luck.

I think this is it:
http://www.hydlaaplaza.com/smf/index.php?topic=34508.0