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danti-christ

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first part of my time (the story of danti-christ)
« on: November 30, 2004, 03:16:33 pm »
with the sands of time i came from the depths not knowing where i came from not knowing who or what my parents where
my first memory came from ashes from a time when i dont quite know when pain is all i felt

all i see is the fear in my heart but i can not show it for if i do the trials of life will spill from my veins and the road which i start to tread will take hold of me and i shall become one with pain and one with hate and all shall fear me
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danti-christ remains on this earth till death flowsfrom all veins

Bjorn

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« Reply #1 on: November 30, 2004, 04:53:18 pm »
Umm... Interesting indeed. Maybe try making it a bit longer, and put proper punctuation and maybe a period in there once or twice?
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