I would like honest opinions as to the little 'snippet' I have written below. I know there are names missing, but I can never remember characters names. Anyhoo, here it is;
"oh, Laanx we pray to thee,
Give us serenity,
Give us love and kindness,
So that we may be blessed."
Farata was kneeling in front of his bed praying to Laanx as he had done for as long as he can remember.
The night was drawing in and soon it would be time for the sun to sleep and the moon to play. Once his prayers were finished, he slid under the covers and was asleep before the last of the stars was shining in the deep, dark sky.
The morning came and Farata awoke. He made his way into the kitchen to make his breakfast of an oat based meal, but stopped suddenly. On his way to the kitchen, he noticed that his front door was banging open and closed. Making his way to close the door, he looked around his abode to see if anything was missing. On reaching the door, he noticed a note has been pinned to it. Farata carefully removed the note and read it;
"Farata Gawata, you are hereby summoned by *someone in Laanx temple*. Here you will receive orders of what is expected of you."
"Strange," though Farata, "I've never known anyone to get a note this obscure before."
Farata has his breakfast, got dressed, donned his weaponry and headed towards the Laanx temple. He had entered the temple many times before, but this time there seemed to be an air of strangeness about it. An air of mystery almost. He was greeted by *someone else in Laanx temple* who led him to *someone in Laamx temple*.
Farata bowed and made his greeting. "You are well met, Farata Gawata." said *someone in Laanx temple*. "You are wondering why I have summoned you here in such a mysterious fashion."
"Yes, *someone in Laanx temple*, I am certainly at a loss as to why you requested my presence. I am, of course, honoured that whatever your need, I should have been the one that you chose."
*someone in Laanx temple* nods slowly at Farata's response. "You are here under my instruction on a most grave situation," he began, "there is a rumour going around that Hydlaa is on the brink of change. This change is not good for the people of Hydlaa and there is already talk of a mutiny against myself, *someone in Laanx temple*. Although I do not consider myself as the 'perfect leader', I do know that I am doing the best job I can."
Farata stood captivated by *someone in Laanx temple*'s speech. *someone in Laanx temple* was a good leader. He had a way of ensuring people listened to what he was saying.
"However," continued *someone in Laanx temple*, "there is also dark magic afoot. I don't know where it is focused or where it begins, but more and more creatures are making their way towards the entrance of the sewers. It is only a matter of time before they breach the opening and start coming into Hydlaa itself. Obviously, you can see that this will not do." *someone in Laanx temple* looked down at the floor and then directly into Farata's eyes, "you are to complete two missions, essentially just the one. You must defeat these creatures whenever they are a thread to you. They must not be allowed to breed or get into Hydlaa." A pause.
Farata waited for *someone in Laanx temple* to continue. He could see that this was hard for *someone in Laanx temple* to ask, so he just waited patiently until *someone in Laanx temple* continued.
"The second part of your quest is to find the source of this new found, and infernal, activity and put an end to it in any way you are able. *someone else in Laanx temple* will give you the 'defensive wind' glyph so that you may have at least some protection. He will also give you several healing potions. I see that you have your own weaponry and would not ask you to part with it so you will take your sword with you on your quest." Another pause.
"Now go and return when you have completed this quest." *someone in Laanx temple*'s voice wavered slightly, but Farata did not pick up on it. On his way out, *someone in Laanx temple* called after him. Pleaded him, almost. "Please. You 'must' succeed in this quest. All hope and the future of Hydlaa lie not with me now, but with you and the sword that you carry by your side."
Farata, looking over his shoulder towards *someone in Laanx temple* nodded and then made his way out. On receiving the glyph and potions, he made his way to the Magic Shop where he got the glyph instantly purified. "Everyone must know I'm on this quest!" thought Farata as he was ushered to the front of the queue in the shop and rushed out as quickly as possible.
"Now to begin my quest and not to let down *someone in Laanx temple* or Hydlaa town." commented Farata as he stood at the entrance of the sewers...
