Hi Arka ^^
I told you I'd restart reading your chapters as soon as I could, and since now I'm trying to get used to a way of being able to read the forums, I can tell you that I've already started to get "up to date" with Arka story part 2.
Why I'm replying then in part 1?
Easy, I recall I praised your writing, either in PM or with a tell ingame, the media I really am not sure about. But I thought it was necessary for me to state it it in here. I must confess I haven't reread Arka part 1, so I'll say what I recall of it.
I prefer to make the comments, also, when the story is ended (this doesn't mean I waited till now to post, as the comment was sent much earlier
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I like very much your writing, for several reasons, the most important one, is that tights the reader, and also, you picture the ambience very well. Your use of words, isn't impressive, meaning that they tend to be plain and easy to understand, and I like that very much, am not saying this only for comprehension purposes, but also as a writing philosophy. In everything written, there's the purpose of communication. The easier it reaches the reader, the better. Together with that, I enjoyed also some hillarious moments, comical or cinic, that you add here and there and spice the story, adding to make it appear light and comfortable to read. A chapter of Arka having a bath upstairs Kada-Els comes to mind, though I don't recall the joke, but I do know there was something I laughed at in there. Congratulations on reaching that, I recall scenes from some time ago, and that is your merit.
I also expressed to you my gratitude for the way you use other chars you've met in the game. You do that with respect, and yes, with a bit of "literary license"
but still, it's an honour to have a character mentioned in one of your stories.
Now to the slightly bitter part, I recall I told you some of my concerns with few points the story went through, of which now I only recall two. One was about Arka arriving to Hydlaa when Laanx temple wasn't yet built, and the other one was about the Death Realm. The first one was regarding a time/age issue that might be not very clear, and the latter... well, it's my thing with the Death Realm. Anyway, I told you, and tell again, that I was glad you made that chapter about the Death Realm, despite it all. And I guess I won't reveal much, since hopefully anyone reaching this point has went through the chapters already (please, do it if not... I wait. Back already?) but the scene that you pictured in there was priceless. Having Arka's mom waiting there, sitting, seeing passerbyes while her sight sense deludes, but keeping the faith that she'll recognize her love, that they were meant to meet again there, no matter what... the scene really hits deep into the reader, not only for what you state written, but for what you leave for him/her to fill.
