(please tell me your opinions on the summarry of my story wich is based on my future character in planeshift)
Secret Thief
Raine was just a young boy trying to survive with his family,he was poor and lonely and he worshipped the higher class races.One day he came home to see a strange man outside his house,this man hadnt seen Raine and entered the house,it was a dark lonely night,it was very quite...until Raine heard his mother scream.He ran to his house and saw the man over his mother stabbing her violently in the back,his father had been pushed in the fire head first and was aflame,Raine was terrified and screamed.The man turned and saw him he approached him slowly,Raine ran to a pedestal and picked up an old broken sword wich is father had foundin some seaweed.The man laughed at Raine and ran at him Raine plunged his broken sword into the mans chest,the man now in pain fled the house.Raine Hadn\'t noticed the house was on fire,despite being the small age of nine he carried his mom out of the flaming house.He watched later as his mother was thrown in the wells along with the waste,it was the way,but Raine felt it was wrong.As Raine grew he turned to thievery stealing from the people he once envied,in this proffession he learned of his parent\'s murderer\'s name:
Blaze Gonalez.He dropped his stealing and went in search for Blaze,he still had the broken blade wich he was gonna use to kill him......
