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steuben

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an enki's rhyme
« on: May 08, 2006, 01:35:07 pm »
the huntress stalks the plains
i follow stff in hand
a tip of stone, a tip of iron
a shaft of wood, a tail of hair
who shall it be today?

the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the clacker
watch the head, watch the back
slip beneath, slip beside
gather the meat for the day

the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the rat
watch the teeth, watch the claws
strike quick, strike true
save the fur for the way

the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the trepor
beware the teeth, watch the eyes
dodge the head, strike the back
gather the heart from the chest asplay
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may laanx frighten the shadow from my path.
hardly because the shadow built the lexx.
the shadow will frighten laanx from my path.

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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #1 on: May 08, 2006, 01:45:02 pm »
 \\o//


nice. :P
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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #2 on: May 09, 2006, 08:57:43 pm »
the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the tefusang
watch the claws, watch the feet
dodge between, dodge beneath
skin the hide for display
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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #3 on: May 15, 2006, 08:34:29 pm »
the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the ulbernaut
watch afar, beware its hunt
strike together, strike strong
the claws your skill to convey
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the shadow will frighten laanx from my path.

zorbels

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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #4 on: May 15, 2006, 08:45:18 pm »
:) I like your poem steuben. I know this is going to sound strange but I find it a very mellow read. I get a relaxed impression from it even though it so obviously discribes hunting in planeshift, which is exactly the opposite of relaxing. Meh.... I likes.
« Last Edit: May 24, 2006, 01:04:41 pm by zorbels »
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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #5 on: May 17, 2006, 11:40:36 am »
the huntress stalks the plains
i persue the grendol
watch the arms, beware the strength
hit long, strike again
leave it to decay

i had thought of it as a cub's rhyme, or maybe a picture book. you know, the kind with the thick cardboard pages.
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Re: an enki's rhyme
« Reply #6 on: May 24, 2006, 05:18:04 am »
You should come to The Night of a Thousand Words and share anything else you have written.

Good Job :thumbup:
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