You have? Now whose fault might that be?
Grawr.
Ok, I onlly just read your history since, frankly, I couldn't be bothered with the rest. A couple things stick out to me. "After realising that, he molested her." Wait, what? Where's the progression of thoughts on his side? Why did he molest her? And did you mean molest, which has sexual inferences, or torture, which doesn't? But yeah, what was he thinking? You make it sound like a natural progression, he realizes that she's stolen something, so he molests her, because, of course... who wouldn't? We all immediately molest people who admit to having taken something of ours without our permission... Now obviously there's more to it, but you need to make that clear.
Besides what Sangwa pointed out about being a Lich, there's another issue... A Lich tends to be a magic wielder, not being particularly strong of body... What you're describing is something more along the lines of a skeleton warrior...
I did do a little more reading, so I have some more comments... Under your "Politics" section... How do you know Laanx did wrong by Talad? Did they tell you? Was Laanx gloating to you, or Talad whining? I'm not saying it's not true, I'm saying that just because you've read the settings, doesn't mean your character knows everything in them.
I agree also with the suggestion of having more RP requirements... You seem to be leaning toward an RP-oriented concept, so I strongly suggest you put some requirements of the sort in there... but that's up to you.
As for the rest of the suggestions, I heartily agree. Also for the need of more information.
The rest is small stuff, grammar and what-not...
Don't use "almost" twice in a sentence.
"10 litres of Lemur tears"? That made me laugh... Do you know how many tears that would be? Lemurs are a particularly prideful race, and so not apt to be seen crying, let alone letting their tears be gathered... Do you have any idea how difficult that would be? I strongly suggest lowering it to something along the lines of 1/5 of a litre.
Your ranks could use some sprucing up... A little drab for what could be quite a colorful guild.
Rule 1.1 needs clarification... It could be easily misconstrued by poor RPers. I could see people doing miserable RP to get out of a situation, or things that are completely OOC and then citing this rule as their justification. It's not a bad rule, just needs clarification.
And that's about it... You've been Phinehased. Consider yourself lucky. I've been kinder than is my wont, and I haven't done it for anyone in a while.
