[RP] Traitor on the loose!

[Chicken_Danca]

[A Scarred and heavily muscled Enkidukai walks heavily up to the notice board and pulls out a roll of pparchment, he unrolls it and using and handleless dagger as a pin sticks it the the board]
A Kran by the name of Ombanad Edensail is wanted by the 28th Forester company of the Odjavedan Hunters for the murder of Ensign Boroth Allianright. the Former Odjavedan Hunter went beserk whilst hunting a Klyros Mercenary who has been constantly seen aiding clans of Feral Enkidukai, who are the target of the Odjavedan hunters. If Ombanad is located do not I repeat DO NOT attempt to converse with him on the matter, take him out with extreme force and bring his body to Lieutenant Alerine Koreada of the 19th Guard company of the Odjavedan Hunters.

[Suno_Regin]

[You made another forum account just to make another in-game roleplay thread containing an event that has no real goal or purpose. I've never heard of any of these people, so why would I care? Am I going to get a reward? I really think you should plan these things out more before you post them.]

[Prolix]

[That is kind of condescending, Suno. I have seen lots of posts by various "well known" personages of role plays that I did not care about. Just because someone isn't in with your in crowd doesn't mean they do not have their own group you know nothing about. Presumably they have a fair number of people involved because you cannot have a "big war" without at least a few people on either side. Maybe only four or five to start but hoping for more. With a satchel of "sombodys" you wouldn't know the names anyway.

At the very least this is connected with the other and seeing as how they come close together in time it may well be more thought out than you think. It might be they prefer a series of small events against the larger backdrop they have painted as opposed to some monolithic event that passes in a week. There is plenty of room for plots and sub-plots and not all of them have to intersect.

That said I am not sure how they expect to have a body delivered except perhaps after an RP fight, otherwise he will just end up in the DR. Nor am I certain how they will identify their target unless he introduces himself but at least they are trying.]

[Suno_Regin]

[I can't find this person unless I have a physical description, I mean. Also, is he just planning to run into kada-el's and roleplay with him, or are we expected to wander around the farthest reaches (I'm talking invisible walls; map boundaries) of the wilderness?]

[Donari Tyndale]

[I agree with Suno. This roleplay is rather pointless and seems out of settings. Prolix the roleplay has been posted on the public forum, thus it is of Suno's concern. First of all, the post contains various spelling mistakes, which implies that it hasn't been well thought of. Furthermore, the names and companies are totally unknown to me. Any serious character would think it is a hoax.]

[Zan]

(I agree with Prolix, right or not .. it was a condescending post Constructive criticism is nowhere to be found.

To the initial poster.

It's great that you try to organise RP events but I do see a few things that could be improved.

The background of this story line is a bit out there because there is no 28th Forester Company of the Ojavedan Hunters and there are also no Feral Enkidukai. Now I do get why you did it. It's always fun to set an RP storyline in some sort of war. I suggest that you try to settle your background a bit better within the Game's Settings. They can be found on the main site as well as in-game, through library books, quests, asking NPC questions and examining things.

I'm sure you'll find some conflict that you can use instead of your made up one. There are quite a few conflicts in the world of Yliakum.

Another option is bringing those groups you mention in your background to life. Have some characters or friends with characters be a member of your Ojavedan Hunters, make it an in-game guild with a nice structure, goals and some purpose, like guarding Ojaveda. Keep in mind that it can't be a part of the official government without approval of the Settings Team of Planeshift though.

With this option I still advice you to change your enemy from Feral Enkidukai into something else. Feral Enkidukai just aren't very flattering to the Enkidukai race. They're intelligent beings, why'd they go feral? Instead pick some other enemy .. there are plenty of semi-intelligent races and monsters in the world. Again, read settings info for more ideas.

I hope you'll take this advice and create something that'll generate you less negative feedback.)

[Chicken_Danca]

There is no big war, for the record
I'm involved with someone involved with a war, however I am not in the war.

[Earl_Listbard]

There is no big war, for the record
I'm involved with someone involved with a war, however I am not in the war.

Indeed, the war is between lucifer and talad, fighting over who will create the new breed of kran. and the second yliakum, the almighty yliakum two which is being created, but laanx extremists are trying to stop this.

So, you have a three way war between talad, lucifer and laanx followers fighting over control of the yliakum 2... and most importantly...



The chicken waffles...


How does that not make any sense suno? Gosh you're a nab.

[JWarlord]

Join the newspaper. You can write all the wanted-posters you want. Just for "realism" I think though, not a real reward

[Donari Tyndale]

They can't write anything they want. They still need an IC backup for writing.