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« on: September 23, 2008, 10:05:40 pm »
If it wasn't for the height of the cliff before him Stugador wouldn't have been nearly so worried.  As it was however, the normally calm and stoic Stonebreaker was shaking.  Heights weren't really his thing and the sheer scale of the task at hand had cracked his emotional shell.  Backing down wasn't an option at this point though, and so he set out grasping here for a nook or crevice, there for a foothold, all the while doing his best not to look down.

Timisha sat near the top of the cliffs near a lookout tower.  Something was in the air today she felt, and  was the reason she sat atop the cliffs.  Wind whipped her fiery red hair around into tangles then whistled along the cliffs towards the Bronze Doors.  She wasn't in any hurry and so she sat and gazed out across the landscape wondering why this sinking feeling in her gut wasn't going away.  When she'd woken up this morning she'd thought she was just hungry and so prepared a large breakfast only to find herself almost completely without an appetite.  “What a waste!” she thought to herself as she recalled the food she'd ended up handing out near Akkaio. 

Stugador paused partway up the cliff side.   At this point any slight slope the facade had before had given way to a nearly sheer vertical surface.  He glanced upwards noting that his goal was quite close.  He found a lip a bit above his head that he could wrap his fingers around and pulled himself upwards with tremendous effort.  “I should never have married a cook.” he though briefly.  He stuck his foot on a small protruding rock then moved upwards again.

The distant sound of falling stones caught Timishas attention and she leaned forward to peer over the cliff edge.  Below her about half way down the cliff was a dwarf ascending the cliff.  “Hey there!” she called down to him but he either did not hear her or ignored her.  She moved back a bit then laid on her stomach so she could lean out for a better look.  The dwarf had reached an excessively large root that was protruding from the cliff face.  As she watched he took out a small knife, sliced a large cut into the root, then dropped the knife to the ground below without even glancing downwards.  He then reached back and pulled out a small flask and poured some kind of liquid into the wound in the root.

“My task is complete.” Stugador said aloud to himself.  There was a hint of satisfaction in his tone but it was mostly overshadowed by the fear that permeated it.  He was exhausted.  Climbing down, or up for that matter, was no longer an option.  Glancing over his shoulder he seemed to note something far away with slight smile, then relaxed and allowed himself to fall backwards. 

Under more ordinary circumstances Timisha would have sat for a bit and pondered the strange behavior of the now deceased Dwarf.  The shaking ground below her though told her that this situation was anything but ordinary.  She  slunk back from the cliff edge to avoid a fate similar to the dwarfs then ran back towards her home as best as she could manage with the tremors below her feet.  As she approached Akkaio where her family resided she was astonished to find it both intact but also that the people there didn't seem to notice the tremendous vibrations that were making it hard for her to run.  When she got quite close to the town the shaking stopped abruptly.  Her mother Lina came out to see what was wrong.

“Why were you staggering so?” Lina asked.  “You weren't at the Tavern drinking again were you?”  Timasha was puzzled.  “I could barely stand because of the shaking of the ground below me.”  Her mother frowned. “What shaking?” she asked a bit skeptically.  Timasha tried her best to tell of what she had seen and experienced but it was clear that her mother was barely paying attention. “Mom! I'm trying to tell you what happened!”  Her mother replied rather absently “There on the horizon – what is that?” Timasha turned to look.

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Re: Roots
« Reply #1 on: September 24, 2008, 05:47:01 am »
Enjoyed the writing style, but didn't really like the way the plot flowed (or didn't flow). But that might just be me. In any case, I look forward to seeing what happens next :)

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Re: Roots
« Reply #2 on: September 24, 2008, 11:13:58 am »
Can't wait to see what's on the horizon :)

However, I was wondering: if she's a guard from the Shadow or Sunshine Squadrons (if I have got it right), wouldn't she live at the Bronze Doors and not travel to Ojaveda and back every day?  ::|

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« Reply #3 on: September 24, 2008, 08:21:25 pm »
She isn't a guard, pretty young actually and just a curious soul... to a degree.  And you're right about story flow.. I always chop things up and quite intentionally though not to be cool...more because I get bored otherwise.
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« Reply #4 on: September 25, 2008, 03:49:52 am »
Fair enough, I suppose it means us readers actually have to think :P

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« Reply #5 on: September 25, 2008, 04:31:28 am »
Hey, wow, I like this. It's very interesting, really leaves me wanting more. I like your style. *nod*
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« Reply #6 on: September 25, 2008, 07:01:51 am »
For some reason something about this sounds really familiar...

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« Reply #7 on: September 26, 2008, 10:02:20 pm »
I rarely write any stories so maybe I'm subconsciously channeling something :). The rest is on my computer at home... forgot to bring it to work today and my nets still off at home :/ booooo!
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« Reply #8 on: September 27, 2008, 02:51:54 am »
Good start. I like the style. It begs the reader to read further.

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« Reply #9 on: October 01, 2008, 08:26:17 pm »
Thank you for the kind words everyone, I hope any continuation is not a disappointment (as is often the trouble with any sort of mysterious buildup)  P.S. Any perversion of settings is not really intentional or unintentional.  Lots of work has gone into it lately thanks to many and I'm simply not always as informed as I should be.  While the story takes place in the PS verse, do not take this to be any kind of interpretation of settings, its merely where it all formed when I wrote this down.
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Continued from......:

“Why were you staggering so?” Lina asked.  “You weren't at the Tavern drinking again were you?”  Timasha was puzzled.  “I could barely stand because of the shaking of the ground below me.”  Her mother frowned. “What shaking?” she asked a bit skeptically.  Timasha tried her best to tell of what she had seen and experienced but it was clear that her mother was barely paying attention. “Mom! I'm trying to tell you what happened!”  Her mother replied rather absently “There on the horizon – what is that?” Timasha turned to look.

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In this moment the shaking of the ground returned.  A roaring in the distance sounded along with the tremors.  It was almost a tearing sound but much deeper and seemed to almost resonate with the shaking underfoot.  Smaller structures began to collapse though lighter more flexible tents rode it all through pretty well.  Everyone was running now towards the forest path, scrambling to get away.  Timasha though lingered, starring at the horizon her mother had been transfixed with moments before.

A shaft of light streaked from the crystal to the ground in the distance.  Soon more joined it, all seeming to originate at the same point in the crystal ceiling.  Something about the picture seemed odd to Timasha as she gazed at the spectacle.   After a few confused moments she realized what it was.  The light was not being emitted from the crystal but rather from the ground below.  More and more shafts of light streamed upwards to join the first until the crystal began to glow more brightly.  The world was soon awash in vibrant colors and dark shadows seemed to fade away.  The depth of the world seemed to vanish as if one was simply staring at a beautiful painting changing and getting brighter with each passing moment.  Just when it seemed the whole world was awash with light she saw an outline on the horizon.  it was rough and random, like a huge branch of a tree but it was evident that this was the source of all this light.   It seemed almost drawn towards the crystal as it focused its energy upwards.  Tendrils dropped off of it towards the ground below now, uncoiling like little vines to reach the earth.  These seemed to form a rope holding down this immense structure as it strained upwards.  The tremors grew worse now, the whole stalactite seemed to shake as if it were to plunge away from the crystal itself.

Timasha could no longer control herself.  It was both a moment of impulsive decision making and curiosity and even reckless regard thrown into one. She dashed towards the light as quickly as she could across the shaking ground.  The world seemed to defocus and wash away in the light pouring through everything.  Despite her agility and speed it seemed she made no headway for ages.  What happened next she always found difficult to describe.  Either it seemed then that she suddenly grew much faster and sped closer, closing the gap in mere moments, or time itself changed making the long journey seem short to her.  She never really could put a good description on it but one moment she seemed ages away and the next she accelerated towards the light and before she knew it she was upon it. 

A tendril descended from the structure towards her, golden and glowing from within.  She grasped a hold of it instinctively and was pulled upwards.  The world faded to a golden and then white....



...to be continued and all that jazz
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