As predicted, the dreadlocks were a fail.
WHY DREADLOCKS MAN? WHY YOU GOTTA HATE LIKE THAT?
Anyway. Another atrocity I must address:
YOU DON'T MENTION YOUR CHARACTER'S EYE COLOR.
How could you?! How will people know to color of your eyes as you
stare deeply into their soul beat them with a blunt object over the head?
As punishment: here are your lovely cliche red eyes. LET THIS BE A WARNING TO YOU ALL!
