Cry of the Fallen

[Rigwyn]

Cry of the Fallen

So quick to buy the blackened shiny stone,
encased in gold, and anchored to his staff.
The price was set in blood and oath combined,
a binding seal upon his foolish soul.
Through slop and muck they dragged him deep below,
where sewage flows and wicked men conspire.
With rod red hot and arms held taught, he screamed,
as vile smoke rose and left his head besmirched.
Branded a fool, he walked among the dead,
and left behind his zeal for life for good.
Now poor and broke, he had no room for love,
thus gave his soul for magic dark and cold.

Come unto me, oh lady of the night,
that I may spread your wicked, deadly seed
and topple those who cross my leftward path
with sickness steeped in pain enough to scream.
Let the living good stumble to the ground.
May their bones break and twist beneath their flesh,
as loved ones cry and yank their hair in grief.
Empower me that I may reap thy fields,
until the last of ripened crop is gone.

 - Rigwyn

[Mogweh]

Nice imagery and some of the lines are really enjoyable to say out aloud, "With rod red hot and arms held taught" great stuff.

[Rigwyn]

Heh heh .. Thanks xD
I never liked poetry because it always seemed dull, laid back, polyanic, or whatever.. But then one day, someone proposed co-writing a dark, twisted story that would contain short pieces of warped poetry here and there. It wasn't until then, that I started to see poetry as a means of doing a verbal "quick sketch"; a method for painting a scene with words in condensed format so that impressions are just made on the fly as you read. Its become a hobby now.

[Aramara Meibi]

poetry is all about imagery, painting pictures, evoking emotions with the simple juxtaposition of words or phrases. it also focuses much more on the composition of sounds than does prose.

how i started to write poetry is, I would sit with a pen and notepad and scratch down blips of phrases that I overheard in conversation, on the news, in music, whatever, until I had an entire pool to choose from, then going through and selecting bits, reconstructing them into powerful little images. this totally changed the way i paint as well, i went from an expressionist action/reaction process to a symbolist deconstruct/reconstruct process.

i think you'll find the more poetry you write, the more poetic your prose will become, the more varied your sentence structure. you'll begin to see relationships where at first you saw none. those are quantum connections, relevance, poignance.

or, at least that's what i find.

[Shaz Zamari]

Great poem Rigwyn!

I love the rhythm in stanza one..it almost feels like a drum beat..like the pumping of his heart..as he approaches his doom. Then in the second stanza, there is a complete break in this rhythm..that epitomises his 'release' or 'change' so well  ( even if he is about to do evil stuff:))

[Rigwyn]

Heh heh.. thanks Shaz.. Yeah, I kinda like the feel of that transition.