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Zackery

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Lycan
« on: June 05, 2004, 11:00:30 pm »
Lycan was only 11 when he had a quest more adventurous than most of the adults quests.  He was sparring with his brother, Gedty.  But, Lycan was sick of losing so he decided to practice before time and he seriously hurt his brother.  So, he decided he wanted a challenge. He was accompanied by his pet dragon flames that used a fire sword. Lycan said his farewells to his parents as he ventured the cruel world.  He chose to go to muggers path wich was for those who have just started.  As Lycan walked a dark figure walked up to him.  He said to the figure\"What do you want.\"
  It coldly replied\"Your soul.\"
  \"I thought you wanted my money.  That\'s what most muggers want,\" He snickered
  \"I am no mugger, boy!!! I am a member of the dark legion.\"
   Lycan examined him for a moment\" You don\'t look that tough.\"
  The dark figure used energy I could not use words to describe to force Lycan to his knees.  Lycan jumped to his feet and swiftly swung his blade across the figure.
  \"Yow!!\"
    He and his dragon kept swinging and swinging their blades till he fell to his feet.
\"Please have mercy!!!\"
Lycan snickers\"Mercy from a kid.  Well, I guess.\"
  The figure said\"Thank you!!! Thank you!!!\"

     
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« Reply #1 on: June 06, 2004, 07:51:46 am »
Uhm nice story but next time try to make it PS-related (There are and never will be any dragons in PS).

But: How was his quest more adventorous than that of an adult?

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He chose to go to muggers path wich was for those who have just started.


So these quests happened a lot, huh?

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 The dark figure used energy I could not use words to describe to force Lycan to his knees. Lycan jumped to his feet and swiftly swung his blade across the figure.


Why didn\'t the figure just keep him there with these undescribable energies? ?(

All in all a good effort but needs some work.
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« Reply #2 on: June 06, 2004, 09:20:30 am »
Dude, it didn\'t let me write more than that so I was limited.
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« Reply #3 on: June 06, 2004, 01:29:43 pm »
What do you mean, it didn\'t let you write anymore? I\'ve seen much longer posts.

Anyway, where do you get your inspiration? Because I must say that these sound like scenes from an MMORPG... :D
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« Reply #4 on: June 06, 2004, 01:49:03 pm »
Well, I didn\'t get it from an mmorpg I just felt like writing a story. Oh, and it says maximum leghnth is 1234 charactors.
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« Reply #5 on: June 06, 2004, 02:05:34 pm »
eh, I think you forgot like one 0 in there :P
And you still can make another post when you extend limit...
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« Reply #6 on: June 08, 2004, 03:25:57 pm »
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