Regarding Kran a few thoughts:
It may present also colored
"also" should appear between "may" and "present."
I cannot find an explanation though grammar pages around the net are littered with this usage. It is because the also modifies the "present" and does not modify the "colored" which would be the case as quoted.
They simply went to asleep
went to sleep or fell asleep. The 'to' is the beginning of the infinitive form of sleep. Asleep is an adverb modifying the verb fell.
329 AY there have been cases
should be "there were." "There have been" is a verb form that indicates recent past.
It also happens in current days, and scientiest
"It
still happens *to this day* and also 'scientists' is misspelled. The phrase enclosed in asterisks is optional but "in current days" should be removed regardless as it is an awkward way to express the same meaning.
There are more such notes I could make of a grammatical nature but this is already getting overlong.
I wonder why Gugrontid the kran was not a notable name it the foundational story of Gugrontid the town being changed? surely the dropping of the pillar on this poor kran's head is worthy of a mention in the time-line. It seems to me that Talad's intervention is a more significant factor in the species world view than just the fortress being built. Did the story change?
If there is a more appropriate way for me to make these suggestions do not hesitate to let me know and hide this comment. I see that a lot of work has gone into this update. I do not wish this to be considered anything but constructive.